KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK. Carlos scrambled to pick up the paper plates from the kitchen table, “I’m coming!” Seconds later he noticed the mess he had made on the kitchen floor. KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK.
“Carlos it’s me, Tammy, your next door neighbor.”
“Carlos it’s me, Tammy, your next door neighbor.”
“Ahhh, be right there,” he yelled as he grabbed a rag to wipe up the remaining crumbs on the floor. He threw the rag in the dish piled sink and ran for the door. “Hi Tammy, how’s it goin’?”
“Well ya know, just came by to see if ya wanted to go out for breakfast, grab some grub. How much money do ya have?”
Reaching for his pockets, Carlos was aware he was broke as a bum. Digging the lint and loose change out of his pockets he stammered, “I have about thirty-five cents.”
“Thirty-five cents? Huh, guess I’ll just see what Bob’s doin, see ya lata.”
“Well ya know, just came by to see if ya wanted to go out for breakfast, grab some grub. How much money do ya have?”
Reaching for his pockets, Carlos was aware he was broke as a bum. Digging the lint and loose change out of his pockets he stammered, “I have about thirty-five cents.”
“Thirty-five cents? Huh, guess I’ll just see what Bob’s doin, see ya lata.”
Good work. You don't need the double indent on the second paragraph, but everything else looks great!
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